Wednesday, January 20, 2016
Poem on a Coney Island Rough draft
Having a hard life where all your hopes go away from you and you don't know where to go in your life. Life can knock you down but you can always get back up. "A Coney Island Life" by James L. Weil , says that through all the obstacles in your life live your hopes and dreams because you will never know when your time is up.
The poem seems that if life knocks you down always try to get back up from all the obstacles in your life. Ask your self how much time you think you have before you go. The poem describes James L. Weil having a hard life and wondering "how many times round I have to catch that brass-ring-sun" after all his hopes filled with helium fly sky high away from him. "Now arms filled with dolls I threw so much for I take my perhaps my last ride" is planned that when all your work you put into and everything you did goes far away from you, take your last journey to enjoy your life before its time to leave his planet-carousel.
The poem compares his life to a carnival and James L. Weil predicts in his poem "on rollercoaster ups and downs" saying that their will always be ups and downs in your life and he says "How many more times round I have To catch that brass-ring-sun Before the game is up." Meaning how much times you have to enjoy your life and hang on till the "game is up"
Although life is a very short matter of time the poem reflects about our rise and falls of life and how you should live it to the fullest. Take your life on a journey and never leave any moment back because you will never know what you might miss. Always try to take your hopes and dreams back if they fly away from you, because it will fall eventually. For all the games you win and for all the things you do, always try to win again and never wait till the game will end.
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Aloha Javon Monico, I enjoyed reading your essay, there were some grammar mistakes. Your essay was sort of repetitive but it was okay. Your basically repeating the quotes for you reasoning just in a different form. Overall you did pretty good but I think you just need to add more reasoning and also fix your grammar mistakes and then it would be perfect!
ReplyDeleteYour purpose is really easy to catch and is really evident, "Life is short" and "To always get back up when you have trouble". I was able to really understand this topic and you made it very effective for people to see the thesis and topic clearly. Your honest thoughts made it evident that you were thorough through your essay. This essay is very good in persuading the reader and informing them about your thought on the poem. GOOOOD JOOOB
ReplyDeleteYOUR INTRO AND CONCLUSION ARE HIGHLY INCOMPLETE, YOU NEED TO MAKE SURE YOU MEET ALL REQUIREMENTS FOR BOTH. YOUR DISCUSSION IN YOUR BODY PARAGRAPHS ARE ALSO INCOMPLETE YOU NEED TO EXPLAIN ALL YOUR IDEAS AND MAKE SURE THEY ALL SUPPORT YOUR THESIS. AS(1+)
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