Justice, cruelty, friendship and love comes to life. Think about how our world is with blind love, blind justice, trading and laughing. In the book The merchant of Venice by Shakespeare, tells us how justice is blind, love is blind, and how we trade with each other. "Money is the root to all relationships.
When we trade or have a deal we should always tell the other person what would happen to them if they don't do it because that's what would make them do it. Shylock and Antonio Make a deal that Antonio is willing Shylock to cut his flesh. When comedy comes to the novel just like when Old Gobbo and lancelot were talking because old Gobbo is blind and they are father and son. They were talking like how are you and how do you look like. And then lancelot was like feel the back of his head and old Gobbo said you have a nice beard and we all had a good laugh.
Love is blind because Portia's father had to let her pick a guy but she wants a guy who is right for her not who her father picks or who's rich or better. Jessica and Gratiano escape to love each other and get married But they couldn't because there was problems between them like religion, love, money or law.
All of those words relate to each other relying to the book. Love is related to religion because we have to love each other according to the religion, love relates to money because you have to buy the ring for your wife and pay mortgage. Love is related to law because we have to respect the judges and love the government that takes care of us. Love related to this book because it is funny and has a lot of religion and marriage in it.
Your essay seemed too short because there is a lack of topic sentences, evidence and reasoning. You could add these things to help improve your essay. I did not see your thesis in your essay which is vital for you to get a good grade. Although, I did like you introduction paragraph because it was very interesting and a good hook.
ReplyDeleteJavon, your purpose of this essay is not very clear, your thesis and body paragraphs don't relate to your thesis. I would suggest backing up your thesis in the body paragraphs with evidence from the book. The form is leveled. The content is not clear, your thesis is not fully covered. Overall I think you can work on backing up your thesis a lot more in body as well as cite quotes from the book.
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